User talk:Mandi2517@legacy41958928


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Well, it had to happen sometime...
Hey, uh, Mandi? This is Bpenguin17, who submitted the Wiki Exclusive. You wrote on my talk page asking me to improve the article, and I replied and asked for specifics. Possibly for the first time ever... a response escaped your notice! I've been waiting to rewrite the article until you give me more information, so could you swing by and give me a quick answer? Thanks! Bpenguin17 22:37, 2 October 2010 (EDT)


 * I can't really believe I completely missed this message. Anyhow, the specifics? I think the main complaint was more so the structure, you didn't use any paragraph structure so it was basically just one big block of text which turned off a lot of people. Another thing was probably the informality of it. It seemed less professional and more like a casual conversation between someone. Some things you could do to improve it would be...
 * 1) Work on your word choice, avoid using common cliches. Using cliches tend to make the article/story/whatever seem more common and less original.
 * 2) Work on grammar and punctuation. If something has poor grammar and bad punctuation, it's a major turn off for people.
 * 3) Try to craft your sentences so that it pulls the reader in more, so start off with an interesting beginning sentence. 19:42, November 17, 2010 (UTC)

Um Mandi bathroom guy actully is in LoZ he is in a bathroom stall he gives you a heart bit if you give him toliet paper.